Modern Descartes Trailer- 2nd Draft

From the feedback that we received from our first draft our group tried to focus on the most frequent points that came up on the what we can improve list. These points included:

• Incompleteness of the trailer
• Title and Release date 
• Sound 
• Fluidity of shots

Our group was able to complete the trailer, the last draft that we created finished at 1 minute 18 seconds but now our second draft finishes at 1 minute 45 seconds. However when uploaded our second draft onto YouTube we saw that the video lasts for 5 minutes 13 seconds. The reason for this is because we forgot to g=cut the music down to fit the timing of the trailer. So even though our trailer may have finished the music continues but nothing is on the screen. To improve our group will make sure that next time we will cut the music so that it fits to the trailer.

In our last trailer we did not include a title our release date. So in our second draft we made sure to included the title of the production. However instead of putting a release date our group put 'COMING SOON' however, later on whilst discussing the further plans for the trailer our group decided that by putting an actual date it would be more professional. As we already have put the date on the poster as May 15 so this is the date that we will use on the trailer.

Our group went through the trailer and took note at the shots that were not fluid so we tried to edit the shots that there would be fluidity. However upon loading the trailer I found that there are more shots that we have to edit in order to have a fluid motion.

We gave our class and teacher another response form, so they can give us helpful criticism in order to create the best trailer that er possibly can:

 Teacher Response:

What do we have to improve?

• The first point that our teacher said that we have to improve is sound. When we asked if she could expand she told us that the sound grainy towards the end of the trailer, this included the soundtrack and the voice overs. This may because in the last trailer we could not really hear the voiceovers so our group increased the decibels of the voiceovers and the soundtrack. To improve on this our group will reduce the decibels so that the music and voiceovers do not sound grainy.
• The next point that we have to improve is the 2nd film company identity. This point came up previously on the response forms that we received back on the first draft. The reason why our group has not improved this feature is because we have been on schools holidays so our group has not been able to access the program that we used to create the identity at home because the program only exists on the schools computer. So when school vacation is over our group will improve the film identity on the school computer then add it to our trailer.
• The next point that our teacher said that we need to improve on is fluidity of shots. In the response forms that we received back on our first draft, one of the most frequent points of things that we needed to improve was fluidity of shots. So our group sat down and reviewed all the shots that were not fluid. We used serif as the program to edit our trailer and it is a bit slow and jumps a lot so it was hard to distinguish which shots were not fluid and what shots jumped because of the system. Now we know the shots that are not fluid our group will edit them.
• Our teacher said that we needed an actual release date rather than coming soon as it is more professional to have a date. To improve our group will use the date May 15.
• The last point of improvement is cutting the music so it fits the trailer as trailer finishes and the music continues. To improve our group will cut the music.

Student Response:

Our classmate has the same points of improvement as our teacher, so we are going to list what he liked about the trailer:

• Our classmate liked how we changed the beginning of the trailer. The reason why our group changed the beginning of the trailer is because we thought that it will be more suitable as we wanted to slow down the pace of the beginning. When we slowed down the pace with the old opening scene it looked grainy so we thought that it would be more suitable to change the shot
• Another point that are classmate liked is the song selection.. As a group we decided that it would be more suitable to choose a different song. The reason for this is because the previous sound was too, so deliberation we thought that the new song was had a good beat but was still uplifting.

What have I learnt?

Through this feedback we are able to realise what we have to change to make our trailer successful. We find the feedback forms useful as they allow us to understand how another perspective when critiquing our trailer.